wow, you are an awesome writer! I don't really see anything wrong with it!! Keep writing! I was writing a book (two actually) but now I lost interest, and completely lost it when I found this site. Well, maybe not completely though - after all, Everything on this site is writing.
@ 66Domino: I did tons of lengthy writing for fun. I used to love it! I actually wrote four chapters of a book I was going to write. All of it was for fun. I still am slowly working on it, but only for fun. I won't ever publish it, but I will be proud of my work.....all of which was just for fun. Heck, We are all writing our life story - and we won't be able to go back and edit our mistakes, they are engraved in the book inside us forever.
woops, the writer got the best of me! sorry if I offended, it's never my intention.
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