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        02-09-2011, 07:24 PM
      #1
    Weanling
    hey guys can you tell me what you think

    This is my new website can you please have a look and tell me what you think and tell if you think the price's are ok


    http://THEMUSCLEMASSPERSONALTRAINING.INFO
         
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        02-10-2011, 02:54 AM
      #2
    Yearling
    It's kinda hard to read the writing, I think maybe change the background.
         
        02-10-2011, 03:05 AM
      #3
    Green Broke
    The main page has multiple spelling errors and there is absolutely no punctuation used at all. It's is blurry, the colors are way too bright and not only was I unable to read and comprehend the text, the whole thing gave me a headache.

    There is zero description of *what* you are paying for, only the length of time that you would receive. So it's impossible to judge if the prices are reasonable or not.
         
        02-10-2011, 08:57 AM
      #4
    Yearling
    Awful, bloody awful. :]

    If you've never had any experience designing a website and I'm going to take a wild guess and assume that's the case here, look into buying what is known as a "template" and then make changes to it as necessary. A good template from a website like Template Monster will run you about $60 USD but it will be well worth it in the long run when people visit your website.
         
        02-10-2011, 09:25 AM
      #5
    Foal
    Definetely you won't get many people buying your product with this website, it doesn't look proffesional AT ALL, no matter what value you sell I'm afraid. You can get the proffesional to build preety website for you at no big cost. But what is the most important for growing up your business online: you can't just simply advertise. First of all, tell people who you are. Then write (or get someone to write it for you) an article about your field e.g. Diet that will make you strong or some free tips how to build your mass and put it on your website with your photo. The secret is to show yourself as an EXPERT before you want to sell anything. This is how online marketing works these days, you first offer some value for free, then you can expect they will trust you and buy your service:)
    Good luck in your business!!!!!!!
    :)
    Roxanne
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        02-10-2011, 09:37 AM
      #6
    Foal
    One more thing- contact form is quite good, but you give people NO IDEA where you are and that will put them off. You should provide your website with your name and contact details, at least address and telephone and IMPORTANT: your photo. People like to know who they're talking to:) And seeing you, will trust you much more. I recommend to do a little search and compare other websites of your competitors. That will help you to get better:)
    Follow the rules of modern marketing:)
    Roxanne
    | Mastermind Team
         
        02-10-2011, 03:12 PM
      #7
    Weanling
    I have made some major changes to the website
         
        02-10-2011, 03:26 PM
      #8
    Foal
    Site is not great.

    Check out my site as a comparison, it was professionally done.

    Horse & Show ::: Raising the Bar for Horse Owners and Enthusiasts!
         
        02-10-2011, 04:53 PM
      #9
    Foal
    The wording you chose is very insulting to potential clients. I would certainly never approach you to use (not that I personally need a trainer :) ). You should be more professional and not act like you're blogging for your main content.

    The title also contradicts what you say about your business. Muscle mass is not the same as dense, tone muscle :P
         
        02-10-2011, 05:13 PM
      #10
    Weanling
    My concern would be that the way you have worded it comes off very negative, and contradicts itself. The man shown on your site looks bulky, not the lean look you are advertising. I work out at a gym, and the people I see with personal trainers are the ones that want their hands held, and want it to be as enjoyable an experience as possible. The people who are already serious about working out have enough motivation to work out alone.

    It just comes off as kind of arrogant to assume immediately that people aren't good enough for your services. When you are providing a service like this, you have to cater to what your client needs, or risk getting very little business.

    Wording needs editing and formatting as well. The first letter of every word in a sentence shouldn't be capitalized.
         

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