Hi Endiku. I have gone through it as you asked and made some observations in bold in the middle of your text. I hope you can follow them as I wrote them.
But I'll caveat all with the thought that as I do not know where you are in your education, nor what your tutor's expectations are, I would like you to take it all with a pinch of salt.
Creative writing is subjective and whilst we all have our opinions, they are just that. Stick to your guns if you have chosen a particular wording for a reason.
The Farmer which farmer? One you were talking about earlier? I would be more comfortable reading this if you start "An American Farmeris a direct example of the handiwork of God. Though at a glance he may not appear to be anything of great importance, he is one of the few beings a farmer is not a being, he's a human. Perhaps use the word 'people' insteadthat understand what truly living means. He works the soil with his own hands, strong and surei would go with 'with his own strong, sure hands'; although your tutor may suggest that this is too romanticised as the truth is he works the land with big expensive machinery. Few can wrap their minds around why he chooses the life that he leads, and many scoff at the idea of constant labor for such little payoffperhaps 'return' instead of payoff, but he knows things that they do not. This man is an example of a different type of brilliance than the world is used to accepting, but this makes him no less valuable.
He is the epitome of strength. Though his stature perhaps 'physique' would be more useful here than stature, which suggests height rather than overall physical appearancemay not be one of rippling muscle or unequalled height, he commands respect why? Weathered and worn, his hands have seen many days of exhausting labor, and could tell their own story if only one would listenI understand what you are trying to say here, but this doesn't make sense. Hands don't talk - and we ARE listening. "Could tell their own stories, if only hands could talk" make sense. Not sure I like it though!. Modestly, I think the "modestly" is clunky and unecessaryhe does not rejoice in the brand of his clothing or the price of his boots, but rather he thankfully wears whatever will suffice to cover his back and protect his weary feet.
Simple yet fulfilling, his lifestyle is not full of glory or fame. Exhausted, the man knows that there will be no thanks for his toiling yet he works from dawn to dusk, ensuring that his family will never go without provisionsthis sentence did grate with me a little. We all know farmers, and they do get thanks, and some of them make money too! It just seems a little over-romanticised here. The laborer does not take what he has not earned, but he does not hesitate to give the shirt off of his back to a man in need. There is no need for extravagant things and shiny blingbling is slang - perhaps use the word 'treasures' or make it more relevant 'for extravagant things and the latest technology, for his treasure lies with the land that he tends and the family that he adores.
Crafted by the land and life that he loves, his mentality is like no otherexcept all the other farmers out there. An unsung hero, he is a true American patriot. 9. Underneath the hard exterior, he is honest and thoughtful. Raised to believe that family always comes first, he will go without so that they will not suffer. The man is not boastful or conceited, yet a taste of contentment and pride dances in his eyes.
Some may call him a lunatic; others may think that he is only the product of poverty and ignorance. This man, however, is the backbone of his country. A farmer, a friend, a laborer, and lover, he is the reason that others can reach out and accomplish their own dreams. He is not ordinary, he is extraordinary. He is America.
Get up, get going, seize the day. Enjoy the sunshine, the rain, cloudy days, snowstorms, and thunder. Getting on your horse is always worth the effort.