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post #1 of 1 Old 10-09-2012, 06:09 PM Thread Starter
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Please give me feedback on this poem?

It's called "Haunted." I wrote it over the summer during a very deep depression. I feel it really describes the awful pain I felt at the time.

The surging numbness pulses through my veins, bringing nothing but an emptiness that sends a chilling pain through the deepest pit of my bleeding heart.
Never in my life did I think it possible for myself to feel this type of immense loneliness, the kind that makes waking up senseless.
Every burn incinerates all my ambitions and leaves scars which never fade. They serve as a reminder of the person I have become.
I am frozen in place by the absence of my only beauty.
I am haunted by the love that was, and this stabbing pain that never succumbs.

~Whoever said diamonds are a girl's best friend never owned a horse. <3
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