11-19-2012, 03:23 AM
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May I speak very honestly and not hurt your feelings?
As this is a portrait of a baby who passed on, it must be very , very emotionally charged to even try to do this. I commend your bravery. I thought about volunteering to do this, but knew that it would be super hard to do.
The body, the bunny and the surroundings could not be better. So soft and appealing.
The problem is the face of the boy does not carry the right kind of angelic feeling that it must , to please the parents. And if the portrait doesnt convey that well enough, then you must improvise.
For this, you need to make the mouth more in a smile, thus the corners of the mouth need to go upward at the edges.
Make the teetha a bit smaller and put them a bit more in shadow. Other wise, they look too , well, how shall I say, . . . Ferocious. Give the upper teeth more of a curve,( ( I mean the teeth on the sides of the mouth appear shorter than those in the middle), and the bottom the opposite, though much less noticeable than the upper.
Make the nose more of the two little holes of the nostrils more visible, but the shading of the tip less visible. Makes it more pixie like, or more like an anime drawing. Remember, you are going for a cute, angelic feeling.
Get the rosy part of the cheeks, and emphasize the roundness of them. You may want to widen the face a bit. Babies have very small lower faces, and very wide mid faces, and high forheads.
The area around his right ear is more in shadow because it is receding from the viewer. This helps to make the head feel more 3D.
Make the hair curlier, longer, more "angelic".
The under eye is not as round as you have it. More of an upward arch, since the boy is smiling. Both the line that describes the upper edge of the eye, and the same line for the lower eye are upward arching, though in different degrees. You know how you smile, you eyes get that upward arch, and get a bit "krinkly" looking.
Raise the eyebrows off the eyes a bit and make sure that they are actually wider then the eyes . Yours are not as wide as the eyes.
I have been really nitpicky and I hope you don't take offense. This is an important piece, and might mean you end up puttingway more time in than you wanted to oriinaly. But, you'll get better and the next one will be easier.
I have found that human faces can be approached the same way as doing anything; just really, really , really look at the subject. See what you see, not what you think you should see. Compare dimension of this to dimension of that, for porportion. For angles, put a pencil up to the line on the screen (liek the eyes) to see if the thing is convex, straight or concave.
And let other people see for you what you can't see yourself. My husband is great about seeing mistakes I have made in porportion and all.
Hope this helps.