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post #1 of 16 Old 03-29-2014, 06:19 PM Thread Starter
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Friesian in Charcoal

Hey guys, what do you think?

Don't be too harsh, I'm a bit out of practice, and it took me about three hours It's for my friend Shelly's birthday, it's the one of the Friesians she works with, a stunning model mare called Femma.

It looks really liney here, I swear it doesn't look like that in real life



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post #2 of 16 Old 03-30-2014, 01:43 AM
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It is absolutely beautiful! Friesians are my favourite...
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Thank you! Any constructive crit from anyone? I know that her nostril is too small and too far down, but once I had committed with the charcoal there was no going back
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The muzzle and the nostrils are a bit small, as you mentioned but not to the point where they distract from the piece. It still looks lovely.
The eye could be moved a little bit closer in (to the left) and made just a smidgeon bigger but again, that's just attempting to make it perfect.
The detail you put in is nice, especially in the ears, mane and eyes ;)

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The nose on the picture is a different shape, more of a Roman nose...eye too far to the left & I would have included the whole picture in the drawing with the neck & mane which would add interest to the picture. Also, the small white on his face is not showing. Nice try but I would do it again and ad the rest of the neck.
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oops...eye too far to the right.....

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The nose on the picture is a different shape, more of a Roman nose...eye too far to the left & I would have included the whole picture in the drawing with the neck & mane which would add interest to the picture. Also, the small white on his face is not showing. Nice try but I would do it again and ad the rest of the neck.
Ouch haha, I guess I did ask for constructive crit.

Unfortunately, I don't have the time to redo it, her birthday is on Tuesday, and I have a presentation to do tomorrow for uni, and my dissertation to write, so I'm kinda swamped at the moment.

Looks like I'll have to scrap it haha.
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Just tell her your working on it!!
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Don't scrap it just because the eye is not located absolutely correctly. And yes, the nostril is a little bit small, as is the muzzle. However don't scrap the whole piece because it reads reasonably well as a whole. Rather, bring a little punch to it by darkening eyes. The eyes are always the center focus of a drawing, particularly in and up close drama drawing like that. Bye accenting the eyes with greater contrast the whole drawing will be better. I know that with charcoal it can be quite hard to get really dark dark. Overall it's a nice drawing with good feeling with the with the main moving and all. Do not scrap it
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Don't scrap it just because the eye is not located absolutely correctly. And yes, the nostril is a little bit small, as is the muzzle. However don't scrap the whole piece because it reads reasonably well as a whole. Rather, bring a little punch to it by darkening eyes. The eyes are always the center focus of a drawing, particularly in and up close drama drawing like that. Bye accenting the eyes with greater contrast the whole drawing will be better. I know that with charcoal it can be quite hard to get really dark dark. Overall it's a nice drawing with good feeling with the with the main moving and all. Do not scrap it
Thanks for the constructive crit Tiny, it means a lot! Not going to lie, I did get a bit disheartened at the thought of it being bad enough to redo, but I'm going to see if I can work through the hairspray I used to fix it and do a few improvements.

Thanks for the vote of confidence! It means a lot from such a brilliant artist as you.
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