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    06-23-2011, 01:19 PM
Thanks Marlea :) I will try to do that next time! Maybe we should make a story together?
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    06-23-2011, 01:30 PM
You know what they say, another day another stall, but for me it was another day another 15 stalls. As I was working on stall number 3, there was a blast of cold wind, so much that you could hear the barn moaning with pain. It was then that I figured out my arms were killing me so I went to the lounge to take a break.

Opening the door, a woosh of air hit me first. Then, the whispers of all the other stable hands. Not wanting to interrupt, I headed over to the fridge and took out some water. When I passed by the group, I snatched up little pieces of their conversation.

"A black horse? We don't see much of those around here." "Its true!" "I heard...attacking..." " majestic....I want him" "...outside."
    06-23-2011, 10:33 PM
Green Broke
Ooo I like that last bit!
    06-24-2011, 12:09 AM
Haha yes that would be cool you are very talented and your use of expresion and the language you use is fantastic!!
    06-24-2011, 08:00 PM
Thanks You Guys!!

Marlea, your writing is just absolutley amazing! It would be a real honour to work with you :)
    06-24-2011, 08:17 PM
Hearing that, I ran towards the barn doors. At the doors, I tried with all my might to pry them open but couldn't. A shrill whinny pierced through the air. I knew it was Apollo and he was in trouble. The doors were frozen shut and I had no idea what to do.

In panic mode I started to pace. Knowing him, it would only be a matter of time before he hurt himself. I had to try something. Maybe if I rammed myself at the door it would open. That wasn't the best plan but it was the only one I had. One, two, three, GO! I threw myself against the doors and that's when I something important popped into my mind.

In all the frenzy, I had forgotten to open the hatch on the barn doors. Sheepishly, I unlatched the doors and pushed them open. Instantly I saw Apollo. His foot was caught in some mesh that must have flown in with the wind. Outside, the clouds grew darker, and the temperatur got colder, I knew soon there would be a blizzard.

I ran to his side, but he went ballistic. Rearing, bucking, and whinnying, trying to get rid of me and the mesh. Dodging his feet, I quickly took in the situation. There was a blizzard going on and a crazy horse was stuck. Looking even closer I realized he had a cut on his fetlock. Worried and desperate, I stood there in the freezing cold, trying to save a horse.
    06-25-2011, 04:30 AM
Originally Posted by RockandRide    
Thanks You Guys!!

Marlea, your writing is just absolutley amazing! It would be a real honour to work with you :)

Haha wow what a compliment I never thaught it was THAT good

Thankyou, you made my day! The next bit of POPPY is up if you want to read it BTW
    06-25-2011, 10:20 AM
I will read it!
    07-11-2011, 11:26 PM
Suddenly, I heard voices coming from the barn. I turned to find my trainer and some boarders rushing up to my side. My trainer, always so nonchalant, told everyone to head back inside. "You too" she said nodding at me. Surprised I tried to reason but she said it again firmly, and off I went.

Once inside, I tried to stay calm but how could I? Apollo's whinny was heard through the walls and my heart lept out to him. I walked into the lounge hoping to do some thinking there but I was only mobbed by curious boarders. Not being in the mood to talk, I left and headed over to Pipers stall.

Feeding him a treat, I started to wonder about my dedication. Was I really dedicated? Or was I just another girl who wanted a pretty black horsey? Knowing the answer, I decided to disobey my trainer and g help.

Outside, the snow was blinding. Sheilding my eyes I carefully walked forward one step at a time, testing each foot as I went. Looking all around, I finally spotted Apollo, and he was free from the mesh. Sighing happily I went over to my trainer who was patting Apollo. Opening my mouth to congratulate her, something hit my head and everything went black.
    07-12-2011, 12:22 PM
Green Broke
Nice!!!! Luving it! Sounds fairly like my story..."The White Buckskin"

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