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        06-26-2013, 07:41 PM
    "Aspen...Aspen!" she screamed frantically. Her cheeks were a blotchy red, and her heart was sinking faster than it was beating.

    "Okay, Eryss," she said to herself quietly, sitting down on a log. "Calm down. We're not going to find Aspen if we can't think straight. Now, let's check the paddock."

    With that, she hopped up and made a quick but thorough search of the place. There was plenty of grass, and a trough in the corner, and the remains of his breakfast, but no Aspen, nor any signs of him at all.

    "Next, the barn. He might be in there and all this panic is for nothing." She thought this more to convince herself than because she actually believed it. After all, the horse had point-blank refused to enter his stall just a few hours ago.

    As predicted by the more honest side of herself, he was not there. Finally forced to accept there was a serious problem, Eryss felt she had two options. She could go back to the house and tell her parents - but they would rage and scream and storm at her for so long afterwards she wasn't sure it was worth it. Or, she could find her horse on her own.

    Eryss chose the second option.

    She then began another search of the outside of the paddock, this time hunting for signs Aspen had been there. There were trailer marks were he had been unloaded that morning, and fresher looking ones, too, leading out. She saw hoofprints leading down the driveway, wedges in the mud of the dirt path. They ended abruptly only a few paces away.

    No matter how hard she looked, there were no other traces of a horse anywhere nearby.

    What sort of owner lost her first horse the very day it arrived?
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        06-27-2013, 07:01 PM
    Eryss looked roung the paddock once again just to be sure. She saw trye marks leading out the back gate she dicided to follow them. They lead down serval fields before entering a narrow woods. Where Eryss spotted abit of a trailor plate it only had f on it. Where could aspin be Eryss thought. She dicided to ****inu to follow the trailor marks but soon enought they went onto a narrow back road and Eryss did not have a clue what way her horse went,
        06-28-2013, 01:25 AM
    Dejected Eryss returned home. The first thing she saw upon making the last turn was Aspen, happily and completely clueless of Eryss' panicked, chaotic search for him standing knee high in grass munching away. "Aspen, you scared me half to death!" Eryss worked to keep from screaming at the oblivious horse and calmly approached him. "Seriously though Aspen, not cool I thought someone stole you and...I don't wanna think about that" Eryss shuddered not daring to speak her thoughts aloud. Eryss pulled some bailing twine from her pocket, she always had some since moving on her since moving to the farm and fashioned a make shift lead rope.
    After replacing the twine lead rope with a proper halter and lead rope Eryss stood a few feet from Aspen in the stall. "alright Aspen" she announced "let's try this again." and pulled the carrot out. Aspen perked up immediately "oh got your attention now eh? Come on the stall won't hurt you, it's your home, you'll be safe here." She soothed. Eryss dangled the carrot a bit closer to Aspen and when he tried to stretch his neck to get it she pulled it away "ah ah ah, you have to come here to get it."
    Aspen stared at her seemingly in disbelief, then to the carrot and back at Eryss.
    The horse glanced between girl and carrot for a few more minutes before he took a cautious but deliberate step forward. "good boy Aspen! Good boy" Eryss encouraged "come on just a few more steps and the carrot is yours"
    It took nearly 45 minutes but Eryss eventually got Aspen into the stall. Now she stood petting him and talking to him. "how did you get out? The fences are almost as tall as me and there's no way you could have reached the latch...." Eryss stared at the horse inquisitively "...did you...did you jump? you couldn't have you're only two and never been trained...that's silly I must have not closed the gate properly..."
        06-28-2013, 10:35 AM
    Green Broke
    These are very good and enjoyable to read. A few grammar errors, but other than that very good.
        06-28-2013, 01:51 PM
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        06-28-2013, 04:02 PM
    [[ Before I start, I want to let y'all know that I mainly write in first person, and I'm not particularly used to third person. I have written in it before, it's just not my favorite. So if I accidently slip up a few times and use the wrong perspective, I'm sorry!! Lol ]]

    Eryss just shook her head, and turned to head back to the house, muttering to herself and she made her way to the barn door, "No, no, she couldn't have. She's just an auction horse, two years old. Nope, I must have left the gate open. I won't next time..." She ran straight into her grandfather, as her head was down as she spoke to herself. She backed up quickly, looking up at him as he giggled to himself. "Whaddaya up to there, Eryss?" He asked her, a cute smile across his face. Eryss just shook her head, displeased with having to interact. She wasn't fond of all of the contact she was forced to be put into with her adults. The only person on the farm she really loved to spend time with was her grandma.

    Her grandmother had always been there for her. She recalled memories from when she was little, her gram taking her out for ice cream after soccer practice. Even after she quit soccer when she was eight, her gram would still take her out for ice cream on Sundays, up until the day Eryss and her parents moved from Oregon to Detroit. Eryss was upset, but her mom had to go there for work, and her dad couldn't protest it since his family lived about an hour from the big city. Eryss became okay with the city soon enough, with guidance from her father, whom she was very attached to, until they were forced apart forever. Micheal Linsford was killed in a fatal shooting in a bank when Eryss Linsford was only ten years old. She was devastated, and quickly got involved with crime. After a few too many incidents, the family found themselves back here.

    Her grandfather looked at her quizzically now, noticing she had zoned out, "Eryss? I asked you a question," he reminded her. She snapped out of it, looked up at her grandpa, "Oh, just playing with Aspen. I got her in her stall! Want to come see her?" Her voice was shaky, for the memory of her father had reminded her of a sadness. She was going to head to the house, but now she decided she would prefer a distraction. "That's actually what I was out here for," her grandfather explained, "It's time for your very first riding lesson! But not on Aspen, you and your mother will break her together. I want you to know how to ride so that you can get her broke, though. So I figured we best get started!" After checking on Aspen, the pair head over to a large palomino, Eryss' grandmother's horse. Her name was Sol, and she was definitely one of the most gentle horses in the barn. Most beautiful, too, Eryss decided.

    Grandfather taught Eryss how to tack up the mare, and the three of them walked out to the small outdoor arena that the grandparents had built when Eryss' mother was young. Grandfather had decided to start Eryss out riding Western, since that's what everyone else rode in her family. Eryss mounted Sol slowly and gently, careful not to pull on the horse's back, as her grandfather had instructed. Soon enough, mother and gram walked out and stood on the edge of the fence, watching the new pair in their first lesson together.

    Someone else care to take it from there?
        06-29-2013, 07:19 PM
    After the lesson eryse was thrilled. She even tried a lope. There was something about riding that gave her a thrill it had certanly been fun. After she helped her grandad unsaddle sol. She went and put aspin in the paddock and sat on the rail of the paddock and watched her horse. Suddenly a bird slept low past aspin and she spooked and started going very fast towards the gate eryse thought she swerve away but one stride away. Aspin picked her self up and soared over the gate.
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        07-02-2013, 02:09 AM
    wait...I thought Aspen was a gelding? But you said she? Typo?
    and babyponies I hat to be "that person but , Eryss* Aspen* n.

    Eryss stood jaw on the ground staring at Aspen who stared back as if to say"what? Oh that? It was noting". His knees had been all over the place and he'd dragged his hinds but among other flaws, a unbroke 2 year old had just jumped a 5' fence. "Grandpa! Eryss shouted leaping of the gate and dashing for a lead rope "Grandpa!!" She called again as she grabbed the led rope and slowed to walk so she wouldn't spook Aspen again.
        07-10-2013, 05:26 PM
    Green Broke
        07-20-2013, 01:51 PM
    Eryss halter Aspen and was about to put him pack in his paddock " he might jump out again...ugh! And Grandpa's horse is using his stall right now!" She glanced around frantically a couple times before deciding to take Aspen with her. She clucked at the horse and jogged towards the house picking up speed until she was almost sprinting with a confused Aspen trotting along side her. Eryss was out of breath by the time she reached the house. "Grandpa!" She panted "Grandpa!" Her Grandpa appeared at the door, frowning in confusion "Eryss...what are you doing? Why are you out of breath?".
    "Aspen....jumped out...of his...paddock" Eryss managed to pant.
    "He what?! No Eryss, you must have left the gate open, maybe the wind blew it shut after he got out."
    "no Grandpa, I saw it....I saw him, he jumped, a bird spooked him."

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