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        08-01-2013, 05:39 PM
      #21
    Yearling
    Eryss plead with her grandfather, with honesty flowing out of her eyes; but her elder wouldn't have it. He shook his head, waving his hand in the direction of a very tall round pen behind the barn. "No, no, Eryss, that horse didn't jump out of her paddock. She's two, she's unbroke, and she's a scrawny little thing. If it makes you feel any better, go stick her in the mustang pen. We haven't gotten any from the BLM for a while, me and your gram are getting a little old for that, so it's got it's grass back by now. She can't stay there forever, so you'll have to come to your senses eventually, my girl.

    Eryss simply nodded and took what she got. Aspen was settled again in the high-paneled area. It wasn't very big, not even as large as the arena Eryss' lesson was in. It was big enough for Aspen to take a few leisurely lope circles around to check out her new spot, before finally settling down and reaching for some grass. Eryss sat there in the middle of the pen, watching her gelding enjoy himself. "Don't get too used to it, buddy. Grandpa says that me and you are having a little lesson later today with my momma. He says my momma used to break the horses here, when she was younger," Eryss spoke to the horse for almost an hour, happy to have a friend that would just listen to her. Aspen didn't acknowledge her too often, maybe a simple head raise here and there, but Eryss was okay with that. It had been since the move from the big city that Eryss truly had any friends besides her family to just talk to and enjoy. She had been very worried about meeting people, knowing it was a small town. Eryss' mother had assured her that once school picked up, it wouldn't be much of a problem. This was all good and well - but school didn't start for another two months. Until then, she was to rely on the horses around her for comfort.

    She honestly couldn't believe she had been hesitant before. The horses really seemed to comfort Eryss, and riding was one of the most blissful things the girl had experienced. She smiled, warming up to the idea of staying here in Oregon. She stood up, brushed the grass off of her bum, and walked out of Aspen's temporary home, making sure the latch was firmly closed behind her. She made her way into the house, where Gram was rinsing some fruits and vegetables from the garden. "Need some help?" Eryss' asked sweetly. Gram glowed, smiling and reaching a hand back to smooth Eryss' hair. "Of course, my girl, I always love your help." The two began rinsing and scrubbing the garden fresh produce, giggling and chatting away.
         
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        09-03-2013, 02:12 AM
      #22
    Foal
    The next morning Eryss got up extra early. Even before her grandfather was up! She was making coffee for everybody. She served the coffee to them in bed and got dressed. For the first time she put on chaps that was laying around in her closet. She dashed down stairs and made some toast. Then she went upstairs again and peeked into her grandpa's room. "I'm going out to visit Aspen," she said. Her grandpa just smiled. She ran outside but suddenly stopped on the porch. It was still dark. "Wow. I did get up early," she laughed to herself. She jogged to the mustang pen. "Morning Aspen!" She boasted. Aspen lifted his white splashed head and neighed.
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        09-11-2013, 02:15 AM
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    The next morning Eryss got up extra early. Even before her grandfather was up! She was making coffee for everybody. She served the coffee to them in bed and got dressed. For the first time she put on chaps that was laying around in her closet. She dashed down stairs and made some toast. Then she went upstairs again and peeked into her grandpa's room. "I'm going out to visit Aspen," she said. Her grandpa just smiled. She ran outside but suddenly stopped on the porch. It was still dark. "Wow. I did get up early," she laughed to herself. She jogged to the mustang pen. "Morning Aspen!" She boasted. Aspen lifted his white splashed head and neighed.
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    ok can we clear up what Aspen looks like? I know someone suggest white faced buckskin but the person who wrote the scene never actually said that so.....? and if he he does have a white face can this be him? http://www.morgancolors.com/MEMCCrownRoyal2.jpg
         
        09-11-2013, 02:27 AM
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    And stared at her as if to say "good morning...you are aware it's 4:30 AM aren't you?" even so he snorted impatiently Eryss may have been up early but Aspen wanted food. Eryss took the hint and grabbed two flakes of hay and dumped it over the fence. She proceeded to fill an old, giant can that once held tomatoes from before Grandma grew them and filled it a quarter of the way. Here ya, go Aspen" Eryss called pouring the grain into his bucket, she barely had emptied the can before Aspen was inhaling the grain. Eryss rolled her eyes, Aspen loved his grain over any food she'd fed him. Strangely enough Aspen wouldn't touch anything with oats he'd even manage to pick out every bit of oats once mixed with his grain.
         
        09-11-2013, 03:24 PM
      #25
    Foal
    Samstead: Oh sorry! I just assumed his face was white, since it looked as if someone had blown paint on him. And I THINK they did say his face was white...... That's a beautiful horse in the picture, but I think the creator of this post has to choose :)
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        09-13-2013, 07:06 AM
      #26
    Yearling
    OK, and also I reckon Eryss should look a bit like this: http://www.visualphotos.com/photo/2x...2-16778901.jpg
         
        09-24-2013, 12:39 AM
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    Samstead: Oh sorry! I just assumed his face was white, since it looked as if someone had blown paint on him. And I THINK they did say his face was white...... That's a beautiful horse in the picture, but I think the creator of this post has to choose :)
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    someone suggested it but I don't think it was ever made canon...*waves wand* I now announce white splash faced Aspen canon. There.
         
        09-24-2013, 08:43 AM
      #28
    Foal
    Samstead : Thank you your greatness! :P. Hahaha
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        09-24-2013, 10:04 PM
      #29
    Yearling
    Eryss stood by her horse's stall, puzzled at what to do to get the horse to take her oats. "Come on Aspen, they're tasty! Look!" She grabbed a small handful of the horse meal, and proceeded to bring it to her face, pretending to eat at the oats. "Yum, yum, yum Aspen! See, tasty..." She drew out the syllables, talking to the mare like a child. When Aspen brought her nose up to Eryss, breathing into her face as to say "are you crazy?" Eryss couldn't help to laugh at herself and shake her head. "Well, I suppose that won't work... Let's see what we can find ..."
         
        09-25-2013, 07:12 PM
      #30
    Yearling
    ^ Aspen is a gelding, btw ;)

    Eventually, Eryss just left the oats in a bucket and left him alone to eat it if he felt like it. He blew at her and she stroked his warm, soft neck before leaving the stall and carefully latching the lock behind her.

    The day had been one of the most perfect days of her life. Although it really went against to grain to admit it - even to herself - coming here to her grandparents was one of the best things she had done in her life. And, of course, her new best friend Aspen was pretty cool too.

    Giving Aspen a quick good-night kiss on his velvety nose over the stall door, she half-ran, half-skipped through the falling twilight to the house. Its light and warmth welcomed her after the chill outside, and the gently simmering pot on the stove was sending out some stomach-rumbling smells.

    "Had a nice time?" Grandfather asked from the couch.

    "It was fantastic. I never want to leave this place."

    A look was exchanged between Grandfather and her grandmother at the table. "Hmm."

    "What's for dinner?"

    "Chicken soup. Go and stir it, please."

    She stood up and bounded to the pot, skidding slightly on the polished planks of the floor. Looking around the kitchen, she spied a huge spoon-like thing and began to stir with it. Waves began to lap at the sides of the pot and a huge whirlpool opened in the middle. Bubbles formed and waves crashed over each other in a brown ocean of fury.

    Eryss returned to the chair by the fire. "Stirred!"

    Grandmother prudently ignored the puddles on the kitchen floor and benchtops near the pot. "Very good, dear. One day I'll have to teach you to cook."

    "Yes, Grandmother."

    "Seeing as you're here, let's talk about school," said Grandfather. "You start next week."

    (Critique is welcome, I have issues with too much dialogue, you can be harsh )
         

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