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    10-01-2013, 09:14 PM
Eryss awoke the next morning to her alarm clock ringing she switched it off and rolled over to turn on her lamp.
She had set her alarm extra early to spend time with Aspen before school.
"morning Aspen did you have a good sleep" she asked her horse.
Aspen walked over to her and pushed his nose into her pocket " hey cheeky your getting a bit spoilt " she said pushing his nose away.
" now boy I'm going to try something " Eryss whispered in his ear.
She walked him over to a barrel and stood on it, Aspen flicked his ears back and forth and sidestepped. "It's okay boy just stand still" Eyrss told him.
She stroked his back all over and leaned on him humming a soft tune to keep him calm, He settled down. " okay Eyrss you can do it" she said to herself.
Eyrss was just about to swing her leg over when she heard footsteps, as quickly and quietly as she could she led Aspen to the other side of the arena.
"Good morning " her Grandpa called
" morning Grandpa" Eyrss called back she saw him walk over she led Aspen over to the gate. " what have you been doing "? He asked.
" oh... Well I've been leading him and grooming him" she lied " That's a good idea " her Grandpa answered her.
Eyrss led Aspen to his stall and fed him she felt bad for lying to her Grandpa but she didn't want him to know what she was doing because she probably wouldn't be aloud near Aspen again.
" by Aspen see you after school"
She left him eating his food and went to get ready for school.
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    10-01-2013, 09:50 PM
Hope that's a bit better
    10-02-2013, 09:40 AM
Eryss trudged up the ranches long driveway and thought about today, she had met a girl named Clare who was really nice and also had a horse they talked about horses the entire lunch hour.
Eryss thoughts were interrupted when she heard Aspens whinny but it sounded very close.
'how could it be that close the stable ages away' she asked herself, she was sure she had left Aspen in his stall.
Then she heard it again it was coming from the paddock on her left that was supposed to be emty.
Eryss walked toward the paddock just in time to see her horse sailing over the 5ft fence, 'Woa up Aspen she called to her horse. Aspen stopped when he heard her voice and stood quietly waiting for her, Eryss jogged over to him and took hold of his halter,"how on earth did you get out of your stall"? She asked him, he just stared at her.
'come on lets get you back naughty' Eryss said as she started walking home.
    10-02-2013, 11:41 PM
On the way back, Eryss spoke quietly to Aspen. He still had his halter from his own paddock, but he seemed content to walk beside her without her leading him.

"What scared you, Aspen?" she asked him. "Why did you need to get away?"

His mellow eyes were warm and kind. Clearly he was not worried about the danger in his paddock at the moment.

Girl and horse walked down the road together, contented in silence. The best times spent with horses were those not touching, not speaking, but simply beside each other. This realisation surprised Eryss a little, for she preferred parties, but the peace she felt on the journey back was more profound than she had ever felt before. Aspen's quiet footfalls tapped out a deep and calming rhythm in the soft grass and Eryss echoed those steps.

It was then that she resolved she would put her past behind her and truly embrace what life was about.

They continued this way for several minutes until they reached their home. Eryss led Aspen up the long drive and behind the house to the barn. There, she clipped on his lead rope and tied him to a loop of twine outside while she pulled off her school shoes and put on her gumboots, which were near the door. Then she began a thorough inspection of the paddock before she let her horse back in.

She combed it carefully from end to end, looking for what may have scared her horse enough to force him over the fence. But there was nothing that she could see. Until finally, a movement on the ground caught her eye.

It was a huge snake, right in front of her, and it was poised to strike.
    10-03-2013, 06:24 AM
The snake lunged at her, but she quickly leapt out of the way. Eyrss jumped back but failed to steady herself and collapsed backwards, she blacked out.
The sun shone in her eyes, she lifted her hands to try to block out its rays, but her hands couldn't seem to get quite high enough. Her head was throbbing and felt as though it was swelling, she opened her eyes and the light blinded her. Sight soon returned to her and she saw the sky above her.
"What happened" she moaned as she pushed herself up, Aspen stood a short distance away from her grazing quietly, the snake was nowhere to be seen. He whinnied once he noticed she was awake and crept up to her, she slowly lifted her hand and he flinched, but quickly relaxed once she began to stroke him. She slowly stood up and took a step towards Aspen and almost collapsed, she held her head for a second.
"I need a drink" she mumbled quietly to herself, or maybe it was to Aspen, she wasnt quite sure. She clutched onto Aspens halter and began leasing him back to the stable, struggling to stand with every step she took.
"Im fine, im fine, im fine" she kept repeating those very words to herself, over and over again as she tried to recount what had just happened.
    10-03-2013, 06:29 AM
I meant leading not leasing
    10-05-2013, 09:53 PM
Eyrss stumbled along the path, Aspen nuzzling her shoulder occasionally with concern.
“I’m fine, boy,” she tried to tell him, slurring her words together. It was becoming plainly obvious to her that she wasn’t fine, that something was seriously wrong. Aspen knew it too; the whites of his eyes flashed and he raised his head to whinny shrilly. However, he plodded reliably beside his owner, solidly remaining there for when she lost her balance. Eyrss barely noticed the incredible dedication of her horse, and the smeared snake behind them on the path. The other half of the snake’s skin was ground into the bottom of Aspen’s front hooves.
Eyrss felt an extreme itching, high on her left arm. She ran a finger over it, tracing the two raised bumps that were slowly increasing in size. She knew that she had to get home quickly, to escape without serious consequence. However, she didn’t know if it would be possible to walk the rest of the half mile home. Her legs suddenly collapsed from underneath her, and she found herself crumpled in the middle of the dirt path.
Aspen pricked his ears in surprise and alarm as Eyrss disappeared from his side. He paced in circles around her, continuing his frantic whinnies.
“Aspen…” Eyrss gasped out.
Her horse lowered his muzzle and blew a breath at her. Eyrss then laid her head back onto the ground and blacked out.
Aspen paused for barely a second, then whirled around and took off towards the ranch at a full gallop.
(sorry if I'm going all Lassie on this... lol)
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    10-06-2013, 02:51 AM
(the barn is on the ranch BTW also that font, great as it is, is kinda tiny)
Once back at the house Aspen whinnied loudly and paced in front of the house. "Eryss, I love the sound of horses but for heaven's sake there's a limit-" Eryss's Grandma was interrupted as she opened the door, why was Aspen her alone? And was was he so upset? She looked at the horse for half a second before deciding something was wrong "What is it Aspen?" she asked approaching the horse. Aspen whinnied loudly and canter a few steps before looking over his shoulder to make sure she was following, when she was he trotted briskly forward. Suddenly very thankful that she'd stayed active even as she grew into her senior years the tiny, gray haired woman took of sprinting after the horse.
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    10-06-2013, 07:36 PM
They flew more than they ran as horse and woman hurtled down the road to where Eryss lay. The scenery flew by; Grandmother barely noticed it and concentrated on Aspen's rippling strides.

They ran for five minutes, five minutes of terror for Grandmother before her heart fell to her feet. A small bundle with dark hair was lying crumpled by the road. Grandmother dropped to her knees beside her grandchild.

Aspen's muzzle blew warm air into her pale face, but Eryss did not wake up.

Grandmother flipped open her phone and dialed 991 (199? 911?).

"Hello?....ambulance, please. Just down Carey Road, near the Sinscy farm...Eryss, my grandchild, has been bitten by a snake and is unconscious...thankyou."

After a few, long moments, Grandmother and Aspen heard the wail of sirens coming closer.
    10-07-2013, 02:52 AM
An ambulance sped around the corner and stopped, Eyrss had gone pale, and her skin was icy to touch. Two people stepped out of the ambulance and walked to her side, a young woman, no older than 25 lifted Eyrss' hand and felt for a heartbeat.
"We havent got long" she mumbled under her breath as she quickly rushed over to the ambulance.
Time flew by as Eyrss' grandmother stood by Aspen, patting him gently. The ambulance doors shut and the engine roared to life. It then began speeding down the road, Aspen pricked his ears up, then gave chase.
He galloped behind the ambulance, doing the best he could to keep up, but eventually stopped as it reached the end of the road. All he could do was watch the vehicle disapear into the distnace.
Eryss woke to a bright light shinning in her eyes, she reached out to push it away and to her surprise felt a hand.
"Shes improved a fair bit, she may go home this afternoon" said an unfamiliar voice. Eyrss' eyes focused on her grandmother sitting beside the bed, and a older man, who she assumed was a doctor. She felt her arm were the two bumps were, now they were just small scabs, the swelling had gone down.
Eyrss remained in hospital for a few hours, before departing for the day, though she would have to return for a checkup the following day. Eyrss and her grandma walked down a seemingly empty street, her grandmother talked to her with much concern in her voie,but Eyrss was not listening, she suddenly darted across the street. Eyrss stopped infront of a store, a tack store, and in the window was a beautiful leather halter. It had golden studs in it, and it was padded. Eyrss knew she had to have it.
"You are not buying a $30 halter" her grandma said, then grabbed Eyrss by the arm and dragged her to the car. Eyrss sat in the car and stared out the window at the shimmering leather halter, she had to have it, it was perfect for Aspen.

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