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    11-06-2013, 04:46 PM
"That's the last of the dishes "Clare announced putting a small pile of bowls on the sink.
Eryss let out a sigh of relief "I don't want to look at another plate again" she groaned.

"Well you'll just have to get used to it, if you want the job" Clare told her as she hung up Eryss' apron,

"That's easy for you to say, you get to wait tables while I'm stuck in here scrubbing" Eryss said teasing her friend.

"Yes, but if you want that halter then I'd say it's worth all the scrubbing" Clare laughed.

"Oh it's worth all the dishes in the world" Eryss said with a dreaming look in her eyes.

Clare and Eryss walked out of the Cafe and into the tack room so Eryss could call her Grandpa.

"So Eryss what did you think of your job"? Asked Mrs Schiller when Eryss walked into the room.

"Well to be honest, I don't ever want to see another plate in my life, but I liked chopping the vegetables " Eryss answered.

"Don't worry you'll be swapping jobs for awhile " Mrs Schiller told as she hung up some bridles.

Eryss nodded and headed toward the phone.
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    11-07-2013, 04:14 PM

"Hi Grandma could you tell Grandpa that I've finished work please" Eryss asked.

"Yes dear I will but if your going to be coming home this late then your going to have to figure out a way for you to get home because your Grandfater isn't going to be drive all the way into to town at 9:30 at night" grandma said crossly.

"But grand..." Eryss was about to explain but she was cut off.

"No buts or you'll quit the job altogether " grandma said in a I'm not in the mood to discuss this voice.

"Okay bye " Eryss said hanging up the phone.

What put her in a rotten mood I wonder,she thought to herself.

"Eryss come over here please" Mrs Schiller called out.

"Okay I'm coming" she yelled back.

"Here's your pay" she said handing her an envelope.

"Now would you rather it in cash or a cheque next time"? Mrs Schiller asked her.

"Cash please and thank you" Eryss said taking the money from her boss.

Clare and Eryss sat outside waiting for her grandpa to arrive, after what seemed forever she heard the sound of her grandpas truck.

"Bye Clare I'll see you on Monday " she said giving her friend a hug.

"Bye Eryss " Clare said waving to her friend.

Climbing into the truck Eryss sat down and got comfortable, " Hi grandpa and thank you for coming I didn't realize it would be for so long" she said.

"that's not your fault Eryss" he replied.

"Grandpa why is grandma so grumpy" ? She asked

"well that's because that horse of yours jumped into her vegi garden " he said keeping his eyes on the road.

"Oh no" Eryss gasped " He didn't damage to much did he"? She asked.

"Only the Carrots, lettuce, and the umm.. Broad beans" he answered
    11-07-2013, 05:08 PM
Eryss heaved a sigh and shifted uncomfortably in her seat, throwing long stares out of the passenger side window. "No wonder she sounded so cross over the phone.." Out of the corner of her eye, she saw her grandfather nod. Silence fell between them, only broken by the slight brake squeal as they came to a stop sign. Instinctively, as she had done with her mother so many times before, Eryss reached for the radio. Grandpa cut her short.

"Don't you turn that noise on. You and I have to talk." He said strictly, switching on the blinker and scanning for headlights. Eryss froze. She knew those words, she hated those words. They were the words her mother used when Eryss was in trouble. She shot a scared look her grandfather's way.

"O-oh, okay. What is it grandpa?"

"That horse of yours might be beyond my training skills."

"What?!" Eryss almost screeched, causing the elderly man to jump slightly and swerve the truck. Eryss' heart sunk as visions of a trailer being backed to the barn and Aspen being loaded and hauled away danced around her vision. Tears pricked the backs of her eyes, she started gasping for breaths, getting ready to start sobbing.

"Woah, woah! Calm down Eryss! Calm down!" Grandpa called over her breathing, blindly offering a hand to pat Eryss' knee. Eryss accepted it gratefully. "That horse of yours is a natural born jumper. I see it now. What you were talking about -" the old man rushed, trying to calm her before she started the true water works, "I was merely going to say that Joe Hinks down the road from us, the guy who gives english riding lessons, might be a better fit for you and Aspen. That's all!"
    11-07-2013, 05:36 PM
Aw, I wrote more than what I posted but I didn't copy it all. ): Here's the rest.


Eryss sniffed, looking at her grandfather with a bit of shock. "What.. what do you mean Grandpa?"

"I mean that I ain't a spring chicken anymore Eryss. That horse you picked out has a heart of gold, but his heart is made for jumpin'. Not pushin' cows or chasin' barrels. I can't train him to do what he loves."

With a sigh of relief and feeling like an idiot, Eryss nodded at her grandfather. "Oh. I get it."

"Good. Now, I talked to Joe earlier. Told'im that I had a horse here who needed to be put over some jumps and a granddaughter who needed to learn. He agreed to do it. But at a price."

"But Grandpa - you can't afford to send me to lessons! I can't afford to take them! I just.."

"Shut your mouth Eryss. It's not your place to tell me what I can or can't afford. And don't you say it ever again. Not to me or any other man or woman who is your elder." Clark snapped, shooting a quick, piercing glare at his granddaughter. Eryss had never offended him before, he had never truly barked at her. She instantly shut her mouth and sat on her hands. "Yes sir." She whispered.

"I talked to Joe and he agreed to trade me. I'll take one of his yearlings, train'em up good, and he'll take Aspen. Your grandma talked to his wife, Sandra, and she set up some sort of deal to cover your expenses. You're going to have to talk to your grandma to get the details."
    11-07-2013, 07:52 PM
Eryss ran into the kitchen calling out to her Mom and Grandma "I'm going to ride English, Joe's going to teach me..." She was just about to tell her mom all the details and how she was going to help pay for it when her mother's expression stopped her short.

Her mom was as white as a sheet and looking at Grandpa with a very strange expression. "Dad, you can't make arrangements like that without consulting me. We agreed that I would help Eryss break Aspen and that can happen whether that gelding can jump 5ft or 25 ft. Just because I have moved back here with my daughter does not mean that you are running my life again." grandpa was about to protest when Grandma moved in. "Jose is right honey, she can train that horse - you know perfectly well she can - and I'll bet she will do a better job than that Joe".

Now Eryss was confused, looking from one adult to another. Her mother couldn't ride English! She couldn't train a horse to jump. Could she?
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    11-07-2013, 09:37 PM
I wonder where this is going to go?
    11-08-2013, 03:04 AM
Yearling's been interesting to watch this develop
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    11-08-2013, 04:26 PM
Well, I read it out of interest, noting the changes in gender of the horse, and then the unexplained disappearance of Eryss' mum. So I thought she deserved to be brought back in. The "girl from bad background discovers true meaning of life through love of horse and good old honest care from Grandparents" cliche was starting to get to me.... sorry.
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    11-08-2013, 04:35 PM
Eryss' mum laughed at the expression on her daughter's face. "I did have a life before you were born you know Honey. When I was your age sure I helped Grandpa out on the ranch, but I that wasn't all I did. I rode English, and I competed in the jumping ring." She smiled sideways at her father before carrying on "your Grandpa never did approve, he said a jumping horse would bring two things to a ranch - a hungry mouth, and trouble. Well, he's right about the first but I'm sure that with young Aspen out there we can avoid the second."

It was late by now and Eryss was exhausted after her shift in the kitchen. Everyone including a very tired but excited Eryss made their way to bed. Only when she was settled down in bed did Eryss remember that her Mom hadn't said whether her own gelding had indeed brought trouble to the ranch 20 years ago.
    11-08-2013, 05:24 PM
^ I noticed that too. I assumed it meant the mum had dropped Eryss off with the grandparents and then left. But sure, she can stay

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