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post #1 of 2 Old 06-20-2014, 05:26 AM Thread Starter
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First Story :)

First thing I've decided to do is write a story. This time I'm committing to it, and I'm going to finish it XD. These names are from Finland by the way :). Criticism is welcome :)

Heli (pronounced He-lee) gazed across the plains. Everything was flat, perfect and soft. The grass was long and good after the wet season. She raised her eyes to the mountains on the horizon before turning around.

The sun baked her bare shoulders, since she was in a two piece swimsuit. She jogged down the hill to a clearing with a pond. She spotted her cousin where she was hiding behind a bush.

"Nice try Satu! I can see you!" Heli called.
"Arg!" Satu grunted. She came out of her hiding spot and pulled her waist length hair into a ponytail.

"Your hair is such a nice colour," said Heli, gazing at her cousin's straight, black hair.
"I like yours more," Satu said.

Heli pulled her golden blonde hair into a ponytail as well. It was the same length as her cousin's.

The girls were more sisters than cousins. They were born only a few months apart, with Satu being the oldest. They had lived together and grown up on Heli's uncle's horse farm. They were unbelievably close and loved each other very much.

"We should head back, it's getting late," Satu said. "Yeah.." Heli replied.

The girls pulled on shorts and t-shirts, and put on old and battered white cowboy hats. They each grabbed a black western saddle and walked to the treeline.

Their horses were picketed in the shade, and they were almost identical greys. They were brothers as well. Besides the greys, the girls had two chestnut geldings, also almost identical.

Satu walked to her stallion, named Comet, and Heli got her gelding, called Magic. They saddled and headed for home. They would be there in 15 minutes if they hurried, and they did, because they did not want to be caught up in the dark.

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Heli sat up straight in bed. Her hands were sweaty and she was drenched. She had a nightmare where Satu rode over a cliff. She gazed across the room at her sleeping cousin. Moonlight streamed in from a crack in the curtains, making everything silvery.

For a while Heli watched Satu's covers rise and fall with her breathing. This calmed her down a bit. She slipped out of bed and carefully walked to the window. The wooden floors softly creaked under her feet, and she was tempted to tell them to hush. She reached the window and parted the curtains.

She could see Comet and Magic moving in the paddock across from the house. Heli knew her father's black mare, Dragon, was in there as well, but she could not see her. Satu's dad, Daniel, was trying to get Comet to breed to Dragon, but they didn't seem to like each other much.

Heli could also see the white barn left from the paddock and the river to the right. A dirty white bridge crossed the river, and sometimes you could see mustangs drinking or even swimming in the river at night. At least, that's what Daniel said.

Heli walked back to her bed and soon fell asleep, thinking of the mustangs playing in the river.
"Heli! Heli!" Satu shook Heli's shoulder. Heli groaned. "Yes?" she said sleepily.
"Dragon is gone! The fence is kicked down and Comet is injured. My dad says he was fighting with another stallion. Probably a mustang," Satu blurted.
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