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Hi, I'm new, and I have a story to share!

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        04-22-2009, 09:27 PM
      #11
    Foal
    Haha! I love it! It's really good and I love how you show the main characters personality like right from the start. I think you should fit in a description of how the girl looks, but beside that it's great! I want to hear the rest! I'm writing a story, too.
         
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        04-23-2009, 06:24 PM
      #12
    Foal
    Quote:
    Originally Posted by sunny7horse    
    Haha! I love it! It's really good and I love how you show the main characters personality like right from the start. I think you should fit in a description of how the girl looks, but beside that it's great! I want to hear the rest! I'm writing a story, too.
    Glad you like it! I'll work on it some more. I'd love to hear your story. PM me some!
         
        04-24-2009, 08:52 AM
      #13
    Foal
    The taxi ride went by very quickly, and I found out a few things about Chris. First, His main goal by coming to the school is that he will be accepted into a great riding college, and hopefully rise to the American Olympic Riding Team. Second, He boards his own horse here, a black Warmblood Jumper Cross. Third and lastly, He doesn't have a girlfriend. I also learned one thing about myself: I was determined to fill that place. Of girlfriend, I mean. Anyways, when we got to the academy, Chris hopped out and opened the door for me. I climbed out, and made a remark about chivalry not being dead. So dorky. But he seemed to think it was funny, and laughed a little. I hefted my bags out from the back. Chris came over and grabbed two bags off of my huge stack. "Gotta keep up that good reputation." He said with a grin that threatened to melt my heart. I smiled back. Then I finally looked at the building of the school. It was tall and brick, with a metal polished sign that read, "The John Whitaker Riding Acadamy." I stared up at it, intimadated by the school's size. Chris nuged my shoulder. "C'mon," he said, and strode up the stairs. I followed, still cautious.
         
        04-24-2009, 11:31 AM
      #14
    Weanling
    Keep it up!!!!
         
        04-26-2009, 07:19 PM
      #15
    Foal
    I would love to hear more!
         
        04-28-2009, 06:29 PM
      #16
    Weanling
    Oh this is soo good more more MORE!!!!!
         
        04-29-2009, 04:40 PM
      #17
    Foal
    Thanks guys. I've gotta writer's block right now though, so I'm going to work on it when I can think clearly, LOL.
         
        04-29-2009, 05:21 PM
      #18
    Foal
    WAIT! Here's more....


    Okay. The school is so terrifyingly huge. Not to mention I've never been on a horse before in my life and now I'm supposed to be an amazing and talented show jumper?? WHAT THE HECK IS UP WITH THAT?!! Chris took me up to the school administrator then left, saying he would see me at dinner. The lady, Mrs. Matthews, was all, I just know you'll be a tremendous asset to the riding team. HA HA HA. Mrs. Matthews stuck me with some girl who after showing me to my room and helping me dump my suitcases in there, is now showing me around. Now we're walking around the school. She has platinum blond hair (dyed for sure), and an overall Prima Donna appearance. Gag. I think her name is Stephanie. She says to call her, "Steph." Double gag. Stephanie turned to me. "And over there is the dining hall," she says, pointing right past my shoulder.
         
        04-30-2009, 04:59 PM
      #19
    Foal
    I'm not sure that I like the way the story is going. Does the girl need to get a better additude?
         
        04-30-2009, 07:40 PM
      #20
    Weanling
    make her be a goody to goody girl lol
         

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