Join Date: Jan 2008
Location: Southern Oregon
Okay, I want to read the rest! I would try to get more adjectives in there - describe a bit more. But, If you get too crazy with describing things, it can get boring. I like the happy medium, so you can make your own idea of what things look like. I also like to write, and I think you are doing great.
If you think it's going along too fast, then that's your personal preference. I kinda need a bit more action - maybe a storm, a cop's visit to the barn, and narrow escapes. That's good, heart-pounding suspence!
"Have You given the horse strength? Have You clothed his neck in thunder? Can you frighten him like a locust?
His majestic snorting strikes terror.He paws in the valley, and rejoices in his strength; Job 39:19...