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    08-25-2012, 10:56 AM
More will probably be up later today or tommorrow!
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    08-31-2012, 09:38 PM
Yes this is very good more!!!
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    08-31-2012, 10:19 PM
Okay guys later tonight sorry for the hold up school started this week and we are getting homework already! So tonight I promise! Feel free to criticize (constructively) your little hearts out that's what I need!!!
    08-31-2012, 11:13 PM
Okay heres some more tell me what you think!

I was just about to drift off into sleep when Journey came back with my favourite sweater, shirt and pyjama pants, all of which had something to do with horses. The sweater said Roots Equestian, the shirt said Stall Cleaning Champion Equestrian DEPT. 1985, the pyjama pants were blue with white horses walking, trotting, cantering, and galloping placed variously throughout the whole pants.
I slowly with the support of Journey behind me sat up. She pulled the gown over my head, and with help from AJ we got my shirt and sweater on. Usually I was the kind of person to hide myself under my clothing, I was a private person, but right now I couldn't have cared less. It was also not until then that I realised how badly it had hurt having to manuver myself into the clothing. Finally after what felt like hours of waiting Journey lowered me very slowly onto the bed. I sat there unable to twist to ly down. Finally Journey grabbed my shoulders and AJ grabbed my ankles ad they swung around in one fluid motion so I was propped upright at the right angle. All this action just made me sit there and sob. AJ switched the bags attatched to my IV and after about a minute I began to feel tired once more, to wiped out to fight out the war of medicine.
Peace fell over my tired body, although I wasn't doing anything being in pain wore me out more than a week of showing. I took a deep breath, finally I could relax. My body was no longer shivering as it was since I fell. I had that cozy feeling you get in the middle of the winter after you have a warm shower and you have all your warmest clothes on and your sitting in the living room with your family with a cup of hot chocolate while it's dark outside. I snuggled deep under the blankets, one of them belonging to me, a polar fleece with a picture resembling Shadow bucking in a field. And of course my pillow, which had actual pictures of Shadow sewed onto it. Not feeling an once of rage that I felt earlier I was able to fall asleep peacfully for the first time since I was in here.
Days passed and with each day my back was less and less sore. By the seventh day I was able to move the bed into a sitting position without my spine grinding together. I talked to my parents on the phone, and thruthfully I was guilty for not worrying more about them. Aparently our side of town was left untouched by the Tornado so our house and thank god, the stable as well. The airport closure was being lifted the following week and they were coming down as soon as they could. My mom was in a hysteria when I first got on the phone, but I talked her down to a sniffle. My older sister, Adrienne, was also in a state of shock. We were exeptionally close for siblings, she was my go to when I had a problem, or I just needed to talk. She once was a rider, but she quit after she too, had a bad accident. She lost her confidence, but mostly her ego, sometimes I think that quiting riding was one of the best things that happened to her becuase when she did ride she was the meanest, snottiest, person that I knew. Now she wouldn't even think of speaking highly of herself. She was all for other people, the complete oppisite of me. I hated people, I still put others before me, but when it came to the general liking of them. I often said that if people were horses they would be so much easier to understand.
What upset me the most was how scared my dad sounded over the phone. I had never in my life heard my dad cry. I felt bad that I had inflicted so much pain and suffering amoung them. I had never felt so much guilt in my entire life than I had when I found out just how crushed my family was.
After I hung up I got the feeling in the pit of my stomach that coulod belong to no other then homesickness. All I wanted was to get out of here and get back home to my room, my parents, my pets, and most of all my horse. This had been the longest I had gone without seeing her and I was going through withdrawl. But I couldn't leave this stupid place until my back was competly healed and I could make the flight home. Shadow had been shipped home yesterday, she had a twenty seven hour drive ahead of her so she woudn't have been home quite yet.
“Hey Kiddo.” Journey greeted me as she walked in the door pushing a wheelchair. “Do you want to come with me?”
“I don't know, for a walk.”
“Okay. But,”
“Thats why I have this.” She nodded down towards the wheelchair.
“I have to ride in that?” I said as I wrinkled up my nose.
“If you want to get out of this room, yes.”
Journey helped me slowly into the chair. It took me a while to get so I wasn't in intese pain. We had to put two pillows behind my back so I was sitting up striaghter than a board. I also had an ice pack that sat right over the breaks. I still had the IV in my arm as I was reciving liqueds to keep me hydrated since I had no appitite for anything.
“Here, but you're going to need this.” Journey said as she handed me my thick fall Arait jacket.
“Ty, just put it on you'll see.” Journey laughed.
Journey wheeled me down the hallway, following the signs that said exit. I was just as puzzled as I was hurting. I didn't have the slightest clue as to where we were going.
“Shh, child.”
When we reached the front doors I could see leaves blowing off the trees, brown, red, and yellow, flutters drifted through the air. Then that's when I saw it, Shadow was standing outside in her wool cooler.
    09-02-2012, 10:36 PM
Whoa hurry up I need more I love the end I absolutely love it!!!! Just a couple grammatical issues but good otherwise
    09-04-2012, 09:44 PM
Okay... this is the last little bit until I get around to writting more which is hopefully soon! I'll try to get it done fast between school and my Shadow Puppet horse

Journey! I thought she went home!” I yelled in delight.
“You really think I would send her home when you were still here, I figured you'd be missing eachother pretty despratly by now, so me and your parents made an arrangement. Then a vehicle pulled into the parking lot. My vehical! My parents and my horse were both here in this parking lot.
“Can we go out there?” I asked frantically.
“Of course Kiddo.”
Journey wheeled me out the doors right into the catious arms of my family. After I cried out in pain when Adirenne hugged a little too hard, which turned out to not be hard at all, the were all a little more delicate as though they were handling a flower that had been picked and kept out of water. And then there was my Shadow, my sweet Shadow horse. Seeing her for the first time in seventeen days was like holding pure gold. She placed her head on my lap ever so gentally like she knew she could be her usual rough, playful self. I wept in tears of joy, in spite of my family's presence and breathing the same air as my beloved Shadow horse. She softly whicked at me as I slipped her and etra mint that lay lost in my pocket.
When Dr. Halleren came out and told me I had to come back, the lump inside my heart dropped as I knew it would soon enough. Now I wept of the longing to be with my best frined, my other half, significant other, my reason for living. I wasn't ready to be without her yet, just ten more mintues would be safice.
As Journey started to turn me around, for the first time in my life I actually yelled at someone.
“NO, I want to stay with Shadow! Shadow! Bring me back to my horse!” I wailed. “Journey please, don't take me away, Please. Please!” I could no longer mentally control myself. It all happened without me even thinking. “Shadow! Please she is the only thing that can make me feel better. Please bring my horse back!” Still yelling I ignored all the hurt coming from my back becuase the hurt in my heart was way more painful than anything I could ever discribe.
I was still crying by the time we made it back to my room. Journey, for some reason seemed to be my main target. I didn't calm down until, finally, Journey knelt infront of me, grabbed both of my hands and said. “Ty, you can see her again tommorrow, okay. I will make sure you see her everyday.” I broke down and fell into her arms. She just held me tight until I was completly calm. My mom behind me rubbing my back, careful to miss the sore spots.
Three days later, just as Journey had promised I had seen my gorgous girl everyday. Each day at ten o'clock in the morning, I was brought down to see her. After my visit today was the first day I sat up on my own and stood with help. It was day twenty, and today was the day that they were going to throuroghly inspect my back as I could sit on my own for short periods of time.
    09-17-2012, 10:14 PM
    09-18-2012, 10:07 AM
Okay here's more, sorry for the wait. I trying to write my History essay before I do this but I managed this much!

After my visit today was the first day I sat up on my own and stood with help. It was day twenty, and today was the day that they were going to thoroughly inspect my back as I could sit on my own for short periods of time.
“Is it bad?” I asked, scared of the answer.
“Not as bad as it was, that's for sure.” Dr. Halleren said reassuring me. “But we still have a long way to go certainly before you can make the trip home, and don't forget about the chip out of your hip. If you were fifteen minutes down the road then you'd be home, but you have an eleven hour flight ahead of you.”
“How much longer do you think she'll be in here?” My mom asked hesitantly.
“Being completely honest here I think at least another good two weeks, but she seems to be healing really slow so maybe longer. Good thing we're in Canada.” He said with a chuckle although I just learned I was stuck here for another good two weeks or longer, I wasn't feeling to joy of the joke.
We sat in silence for a while until Journey broke the silence, “I hate to break it to you guys but, I really have to get back, Mel's having problems with some of the boarders and a few of the new foals so she really needs me. I can't get a flight in for about six days so I'll be here for a while.”
“Well I think we all see that reasonable, you have a stable to run, Journey don't worry about us. We're going to be fine here.” My dad stated.
“Guys what happens if I suck it up and take a few planes home instead of just one?”
They all looked at each other and raised their eyebrows. They all knew I could do it, they just didn't want me to get worse. They sat in silence and pondered for a few moments and then my mother finally spoke.
“Well Tyllore, I don't think that's a good idea, you have to heal and sitting on a plane is defiantly not good for your back at all.”
“Mom you know I can suck it up, and I'll heal faster at home because I won't be scared. You know I have a phobia of hospitals.”
    09-22-2012, 06:32 PM
Good take as long as you need to make it better (which is close to impossible) but, very good!
    09-27-2012, 01:00 AM
"Honey I know you're scared and hurting but, I don't think that you're well enough to make the flights home. You know, you still have to get through the airports." My mom said trying to fight me.
"Mom I'll just suck it up, you know I can."
"Ty, sweetie, there's a time to draw a line when it comes to sucking it up, especially when you're hurt as bad as you are. Don't you remember when you went to camp this summer and your back was sore from falling off before Christmas still, that's because you sucked it up to much and were to stubborn to admit how bad it hurt, and where did that end you up at camp?"
"First aid." I mumbled under my breath bringing back the memories.
Early this summer when I had a break in shows I was accepted to the most advanced horse summer camp in Canada. The previous December I was riding a young horse for a friend and I fell off and landed right on my behind! It wasn't as funny as it sounds, for me at least. It lurched my back real bad and it had never gotten better. Anyways, so at camp I had never ridden that hard in my entire life for six hours a day for three weeks in a row. So my back decided it would act up. His ended me up in first aid doped up on muscle relaxants to try and stop the seizing muscles around my spine.
"Okay, I know where that got me but,"
"There is no buts about it Tyllore(Pronounced Tyler, yes that is my real name and yes I am a girl) you are not making the trip home until Dr. Halleren says that it's okay and you are going to be able to make it comfortably."
"Mom! Please I hate it here, I hate the food, I hate the city noise, and I hate everything about hospitals!" I yelled.
"Tyllore calm down please, there is no need to yell, please keep your voice down there are other people here too."
"I'm sorry, but can I just have some time alone?"
"Fine." She said and her Journey and my dad walked out of the room.
"Well I didn't think that you would actually leave." I said, to myself.
Still sitting I tried to slowly lay down. I made it half way before the stabbing sensation came back. I cried out a little but managed to make it all the way down eventually.

This is all I have right now, I have lots of homework right now and I am having big problems with my horse's behavior right now...Oh greenies how we love them :p Anyways I will try to write more tommorrow when I have the chance after I go to the barn and knock some sense into my mare :P So hope you like it!

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