Something I wrote for english a while back
 
 

       The Horse Forum > Horse Pictures, Videos, Artwork, and Contests > Horse Stories and Poems

Something I wrote for english a while back

This is a discussion on Something I wrote for english a while back within the Horse Stories and Poems forums, part of the Horse Pictures, Videos, Artwork, and Contests category
  • Something i wrote for english

 
LinkBack Thread Tools
    01-28-2011, 02:27 PM
  #1
Foal
Something I wrote for english a while back

I wrote this poem for english class a while back and figured I'd share it with ya'll.

I galloped freely, going where I please,
Until humans captured me, so they could travel with ease,
I looked longingly, at the open pastures abroad,
Wishing I could once again graze all day long,
As my rider mounts, sticking his vicious metal into my stomach,
I throw out a few bucks, wishing this rider the best of luck.
The open pastures are my goal, if only I could lose this fool.
Foals play in the fields and are curious about my pursuit.
A fence is the one thing, keeping me from all that green!
I jump it freely, soaring, and landing once again,
My destination reached, I begin to graze.
I hear my rider speaking of all my grace!

Critique, tell me what you think!!
     
Sponsored Links
Advertisement
 
    01-31-2011, 10:53 AM
  #2
Foal
Really?!?! Nobody has anything to say about this?
     
    01-31-2011, 11:01 AM
  #3
Banned
Well it's pretty good.

I like how you based on back then and now. But realisticly I don't think horses long for freedom
     
    01-31-2011, 01:44 PM
  #4
Foal
Quote:
Originally Posted by Katesrider011    
Well it's pretty good.

I like how you based on back then and now. But realisticly I don't think horses long for freedom
Why do you say that? I think that it's quite possible for them to long freedom. If they have the intelligence to know that during that canter, if on the left lead, and the rider switches weight to the right seat bone, the horse should switch lead, they, I think at least, they are intelligent to wish for freedom. Maybe not all of the want it. But regardless- it was more about how riders could be cruel with spurs back in the day, and the horse wanted grass more so than freedom. If you think about it, though (realistically), if the horse likes to speed up to get to the barn, if drag their feet when they leave, could they also not want to be free? I mean, those are signs of: Wanting to get back to their stall, or not wanting to leave it. Thanks for your opinion.
     
    01-31-2011, 01:46 PM
  #5
Showing
Quote:
Originally Posted by DiamondsMyLady    
I mean, those are signs of: Wanting to get back to their stall, or not wanting to leave it.
We call that being barn sour.
     
    01-31-2011, 02:01 PM
  #6
Banned
Horse's have great memory (where their intelligence to know to do a canter comes from). Maybe way back in the dark ages when horse's were first captured to be ridden they might have remembered what freedom was like. Now a day's they don't know what being wild and free is like, they don't know what it is cause they haven't experienced it, and besides they'd live a much better life in captivity than in the wild. A horse has the freedom to do what it pleases while it's not being ridden while it's in it's paddock that you provide for it.

I believe it's a proven fact that animals don't look into the future near as far as humans can, therefore, they won't be looking into the future about being free. It's my personal belief that they don't care where they are so long as they are getting attention, food, and some shelter.

I liked the poem, though.
     
    01-31-2011, 02:02 PM
  #7
Foal
Quote:
Originally Posted by Speed Racer    
We call that being barn sour.
Not exactly. If a horse bolts into the barn, or rears because you're holding him back with all your might, then yes. But what i'm speaking of is different. A horse that gets some bounce or.. pep in their step, I would hardly call that barn sour.
Anyway, I wasn't really asking critique on if the horse could long for freedom, simply the poem. Perhaps I worded wrong, but arguement is not needed.

~Thanks,
Allison & Diamond
     
    01-31-2011, 02:06 PM
  #8
Showing
I'm not arguing with you, I merely told you what wanting to be in their stalls or not leaving their stalls meant. A horse doesn't have to be tearing around like mad to be barn sour.

I didn't like the poem. It was trite, juvenile, and the rhythm was off.
     
    01-31-2011, 02:06 PM
  #9
Foal
Quote:
Originally Posted by Katesrider011    
Horse's have great memory (where their intelligence to know to do a canter comes from). Maybe way back in the dark ages when horse's were first captured to be ridden they might have remembered what freedom was like. Now a day's they don't know what being wild and free is like, they don't know what it is cause they haven't experienced it, and besides they'd live a much better life in captivity than in the wild. A horse has the freedom to do what it pleases while it's not being ridden while it's in it's paddock that you provide for it.

I believe it's a proven fact that animals don't look into the future near as far as humans can, therefore, they won't be looking into the future about being free. It's my personal belief that they don't care where they are so long as they are getting attention, food, and some shelter.

I liked the poem, though.
Thanks! And yes, I agree with you. If a horse were to be walking along a fence line, and *longed* to get to the other pasture, would you agree with that?? Not trying to start an arguement, or a debate, really, just curious as to everyone's opinions :]
     
    01-31-2011, 02:08 PM
  #10
Banned
When my horse walks along the fence line is when she's curious as to what I'm doing, or she's about to be fed. The rest of the time she spends grazing, and doing horse things.
     

Thread Tools

Similar Threads
Thread Thread Starter Forum Replies Last Post
A Question For English Riders - Back Up? SorrelHorse Horse Riding 26 03-29-2014 12:55 AM
English tack so I don't break my back! Chrome Horse Tack and Equipment 30 12-28-2010 09:19 PM
just something I wrote xxemmabbzxx Horse Stories and Poems 3 10-07-2010 08:41 PM
Back again about Blu, English riding, and Gymkhana...help! BluMagic Horse Training 3 11-21-2007 06:24 PM



All times are GMT -4. The time now is 09:28 AM.


Powered by vBulletin® Version 3.8.5
Copyright ©2000 - 2014, Jelsoft Enterprises Ltd.
Search Engine Friendly URLs by vBSEO 3.6.0