Join Date: Aug 2010
Location: Southeastern PA
Everything looks really good. I read every word looking for typos, and found none. The only thing I would say is that this sentence sounds a bit informal:
Lady has been a member of our family since she was a mere four months old, and our family mount for many years and taught all of us kids how to ride, as well as produced some fantastic Arabian foals throughout the years. She is one of our treasured family member.
It's the all of us kids part. To me that's what you would say, but not write. But I am old school English and very formal. Personally I'd say, all of the children in our family.
But I am nitpicking and anal.
Also I find the font of the name of the horse hard to read, this bit
HFA Hi Que
1989 Black Arabian Mare
(Triple A Hardee x Khalia Que)
The fact that I am nitpicking on such small things, really means more than you realize, I am so over the top about things, you have no idea! It looks great!