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        09-15-2012, 11:43 PM
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    Weanling
    Talking Critique a song I wrote!

    What do you think. You may critique my voice but I'm maily focused on the lyrics. Enjoy!
    http://youtu.be/PPNsfE0WXYYLyrics:

    I miss the days when we were happy


    I miss the days when we all just didn't care


    Why can't you see?


    How this is affecting me


    I just don't know


    How I could ever let this go



    I miss those days when we all didn't lie


    I miss those days when I didn't have to cry


    But now all that's left are memories


    Of how we used to always be...


    Sometimes things don't go our way


    Sometimes you won't ever get a say



    But if we worry now


    We'll always have our heads stuck up in the clouds


    We need to forget how we used to act


    And focus on the things that we've always lacked



    I miss those days when I would see my family smile


    I miss those days when we would all tell stories


    That we hadn't heard in awhile....


    Sometimes life gets you down


    But you have to get up, and plant your feet on the ground




    those memories
    are what make me me


    I won't ever forget how we used to be....


    Now that I finally see...



    These days I sit and reminisce


    About all the things that I'm going to miss



    But now all that's left are memories


    Of how I'm going to...


    Become a better me...


    Become.... a better me
    BTW this song has nothing to do with my life, it is dedicated to people who have a hard life, or go through life with hardships. Thanx again!

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        12-16-2012, 10:24 PM
      #2
    Foal
    I like it.
         

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