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post #1 of 2 Old 09-15-2012, 11:43 PM Thread Starter
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Talking Critique a song I wrote!

What do you think. You may critique my voice but I'm maily focused on the lyrics. Enjoy!

I miss the days when we were happy

I miss the days when we all just didn't care

Why can't you see?

How this is affecting me

I just don't know

How I could ever let this go

I miss those days when we all didn't lie

I miss those days when I didn't have to cry

But now all that's left are memories

Of how we used to always be...

Sometimes things don't go our way

Sometimes you won't ever get a say

But if we worry now

We'll always have our heads stuck up in the clouds

We need to forget how we used to act

And focus on the things that we've always lacked

I miss those days when I would see my family smile

I miss those days when we would all tell stories

That we hadn't heard in awhile....

Sometimes life gets you down

But you have to get up, and plant your feet on the ground

those memories
are what make me me

I won't ever forget how we used to be....

Now that I finally see...

These days I sit and reminisce

About all the things that I'm going to miss

But now all that's left are memories

Of how I'm going to...

Become a better me...

Become.... a better me
BTW this song has nothing to do with my life, it is dedicated to people who have a hard life, or go through life with hardships. Thanx again!

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post #2 of 2 Old 12-16-2012, 10:24 PM
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I like it.
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