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finn113 09-15-2012 11:43 PM

Critique a song I wrote!
 
What do you think. You may critique my voice but I'm maily focused on the lyrics. Enjoy!
http://youtu.be/PPNsfE0WXYYLyrics:

I miss the days when we were happy


I miss the days when we all just didn't care


Why can't you see?


How this is affecting me


I just don't know


How I could ever let this go



I miss those days when we all didn't lie


I miss those days when I didn't have to cry


But now all that's left are memories


Of how we used to always be...


Sometimes things don't go our way


Sometimes you won't ever get a say



But if we worry now


We'll always have our heads stuck up in the clouds


We need to forget how we used to act


And focus on the things that we've always lacked



I miss those days when I would see my family smile


I miss those days when we would all tell stories


That we hadn't heard in awhile....


Sometimes life gets you down


But you have to get up, and plant your feet on the ground




those memories
are what make me me


I won't ever forget how we used to be....


Now that I finally see...



These days I sit and reminisce


About all the things that I'm going to miss



But now all that's left are memories


Of how I'm going to...


Become a better me...


Become.... a better me
BTW this song has nothing to do with my life, it is dedicated to people who have a hard life, or go through life with hardships. Thanx again!


mgsavannah1315 12-16-2012 10:24 PM

I like it.


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