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BuckOff41570 11-15-2008 01:56 PM

Poem I wrote...
 
Would love some critiques on it.

"Forgotten Cowgirl"

Hands of leather and sun baked skin
A slender body with shirt tucked in
Jeans aged to grey...stained and torn
Boots cracked and faded...duely worn

Atop a horse she rides with grace
With years of work upon her face
Hair pulled back to show her eyes
The eternal darkness of midnight skies

She rides alone 'til time does end
So with this time she will tend
Reins in hand and rope at side
She looks no more for Him to guide

A dwindling hope that died with age
Has rekindled itself with sorrow and rage
But no one will know on her face of stone
As she rides through life all alone

But she has work to do...cattle to feed
Pastures to plant and crops to seed
No reason to dwell on what's no longer there
She's given up waiting for someone to care.

Kura 11-16-2008 09:09 AM

Very emotional.. and a little sad..

BuckOff41570 11-16-2008 05:19 PM

Quote:

Originally Posted by Kura (Post 190247)
Very emotional.. and a little sad..

haha...thank you?

kickshaw 11-19-2008 12:01 PM

very sad....but very good!

Flexion 11-27-2008 08:10 PM

Aww I like it. A little sad but very good :)

star struck 11-28-2008 11:13 PM

saaaad............ I like your idea, and to tell the truth, i've been wanting to write a Cowgirl poem/song, but it never fell together very well.....

great job!

Rebelappy 12-31-2008 06:11 PM

i love it

smrobs 01-01-2009 03:12 AM

That is a really good poem. Sad but good. :'')

BuckOff41570 01-04-2009 08:19 AM

haha thank you guys. I always find it easier to write sad poems versus happy ones.

mlkarel2010 01-05-2009 07:04 PM

That's an amazing poem. Thought about entering it in any contests?


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