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babyponies 06-14-2013 05:21 PM

Chapter 1

Sophie pulled the saddle onto willows back her little spirited Thoroughbred. Just that moment a shiny ford came up the road and out stepped out. Amy rover who had long blonde hair and wore shiny black jodhpurs and a nice pink top with diamonds on it the next one to step out was Samantha Davis..
should i continue :D

Tobysthebesthorseever 06-14-2013 07:16 PM

sure, why not? go for it!

ChristineNJ 06-14-2013 07:53 PM

?? Your first sentence doesn't make sense???

babyponies 06-14-2013 08:58 PM

Yeah never duble checked it ChristineNJ and ill add more tomorrow.
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Gossip 07-06-2013 01:35 PM

Remember to put periods in appropriate places. You really should double check, I had to reread it several times to understand it. Sorry if I'm a little blunt, just trying to be helpful. Remember to also capitalize titles and names. Willow, Rover and Nightmare all need to be capitalized:)

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