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babyponies 07-10-2013 06:01 PM

should i finish
 
Sophie pulled on a pair of tight skinny black jeans and her t shirt that said fresh after she staightend her hair and did her make up. Sophie went and meet her friends Jess and Morgan at the bus stop they where all 14 yeras old. they all went into town and bought tons of cloths. sophie was the one who bellonged more in the city she was into boys big time and cloths and most importantly make up thought Jess.

when sophie arrived home later that day her dad was sitting in the living room on his laptop you home.My mum just came thought the door carrying food bags. Me and you mum have dicided to send you to a horse camp said lan sophies dad. No sreamed Sophie no.

Gossip 07-11-2013 05:12 AM

I think you shouldn't finish. Not because it was horrible but because you've started 4 or 5 stories already on this forum, asking if you should finish, but most of them you never continue. Commit yourself to a couple stories and stop coming up with new ones, please!

babyponies 07-11-2013 05:14 AM

Sophie pulled on a pair of tight skinny black jeans and her t shirt that said fresh after she straightened her hair and did her make up. Sophie went and meet her friends Jess and Morgan at the bus stop they where all 14 years old. They all went into town and bought tons of cloths. Sophie was the one who belonged more in the city she was into boy’s big time and cloths and most importantly make up thought Jess.


When Sophie arrived home later that day her dad was sitting in the living room on his laptop you home. My mum just came thought the door carrying food bags. Me and you mum have decided to send you to a horse camp said lan Sophie’s dad. No screamed Sophie no. Sophie was a fashion teen not an animal teen and most differently not horses. She started to run out of the room in a huff. Listen young lady you need to calm down it will help calm you down said her dad.

DancingArabian 07-11-2013 08:10 AM

Ditto what was already said.

Also, spelling and grammar go a long way to making a good story. You need to also write in the correct style. For example, spoken words are written in a different format than a regular sentence.
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