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Brighteyes 05-04-2009 11:11 PM

Brighteye's is a terrible poet.
 
I have a school assignment where I have to write a poem *Ugh*, so I thought everyone else here would like to read the world's worst horse poem.

A Trail Horse's Prayer

Let me be willing, let me be strong,
Though the load is heavy and the trail is long;
Let my soul be cheerful and my heart be pure;
Let my gaint be easy and my steps be sure.

(I need something here, just can't think of anything...)
I lift up my prayer to the God they say
Was also born on a bed of hay.

Brighteyes 05-04-2009 11:28 PM

Holy F-in' rule breaker, Batman, a double post!
 
This verision of the last part sounds a little better to me...



I lift my prayer to the God
Whom many faithful say
Was, just as I, born on beds of hay.

(Just keepin' it simple :-) )

LeahKathleen 05-04-2009 11:53 PM

I like it, that's really cute.

What about, for the end?


I lift my prayer to the God
Whom many faithful say
Was born just like me
On a soft bed of hay.

I think that has a little bit more rhythm maybe? But I'm not a poet either, ha ha.

Also, love you name. Don't know if it's a reference to the artist, but I love Conor Oberst. :]

Brighteyes 05-05-2009 12:22 AM

I'm surprised you picked up my reference, I think you're the first one who's said anything :D

And you're a way better poet then me, that does sound a lot more rhythmic :wink:

LeahKathleen 05-05-2009 12:27 AM

Ha ha. I love Bright Eyes... HE is an incredible poet.

And thanks. Ha ha.


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